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Gaby Brogan's avatar

Whoa, this is wild. The language experimentation has that thick, tactile energy of A Clockwork Orange, where you have to tune your ear to the rhythm before it clicks. The prose is tense and unsettling in all the right ways. Chilling final paragraph, too.

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Johnathan Reid's avatar

Thanks so much for taking the time to read this piece, Gaby. Feedback like yours makes any writers' day. I do like to make the 'good guys' imperfect and the bad never wholly evil – yin & yang, etc.

This draft scene will be published in an edited form as part of my Consilience Series' novel #2's serialisation, launching October 14th – Ada Lovelace Day!

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