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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Igniting a passion in a younger generation for the craft of writing is a beautiful thing. I suspect we will see some small rejection of social media norms in favor of more personal gathering spaces, and it will begin with that same generation. That desire will have been fostered by willing people like you, Johnathan. Great job!

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That's an exceptionally enigmatic story. Which I guess was your intention. Obviously it makes me think of End of Eternity, but that's a good thing.

If you want my feedback then I would say it's exceptionally well written and crafted, especially in terms of the narrative structure (which is ironic of course since it's about time-stuff), which dives straight into the action, sets up the tension, then a little flashback explanation, then on to the denouement, and a twisty ending. Your title of course gives away the ending which I guess is also the point. Which is even better done because as a reader one is still hoping he will succeed in his task. So, to be able to get a reader to root for the character despite knowing the end is very good writing.

It is also the kind of story that compels you to think about it afterwards. Maybe even read it again. That enigmatic last line, I mean.

I'm afraid I haven't read Atwood so I can't get those bonus points. Although I can hazard a guess it's something about 'air of the future' or 'time and tradition' or somesuch.

I'm pleased you had such a rewarding time at your gathering. And well done you for getting through it. It must be a lovely feeling indeed when a student approaches you in that way.

P.S. that's a really good pic of you.

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