Definitely, definitely, definitely getting the Aliens/Starship Troopers inspiration in this piece. I had this mental picture of Vasquez the entire time (special bionic-limb-edition).
So many parts stuck out that I can't think of a way to organize them. List time:
1. “You sayin’ armless is harmless, sweetie?” - again, you must have some ability to enter a space marine zen-state. Perfect line.
2. "Rodice’s over-the-shoulder railguns. Firing slugs of heat-fused material sucked up from wherever she stood, her pack resembled a real-time ammo-making furnace. As the pace picked up, the inside of her helmet glowed like an inner planet’s OTC holo. Sometimes I heard her laughing as she sprayed out another chattering salvo." - Siri, play the Doom soundtrack
3. The moment when her limb sprouts a whole garden of artillery. The entire piece, for that matter, came laced with adrenaline.
The only think that threw me off was that sometimes the piece switched to present tense. "After a few exhausting minutes, I’m forced to reload" was one, and I think I spotted a few other places. Understandable given the deadline.
A great action-oriented piece overall, full of 'esprit de corps', and 'esprit de Prompt Quest'.
This is a really great pastiche - lots of fun here with the blatant 'dropship scene in aliens starring Vasquez' segues into the first battle sequence in Starship troopers, both of which are fun scenes. I shall have to put those movies on my rewatch list.
Definitely, definitely, definitely getting the Aliens/Starship Troopers inspiration in this piece. I had this mental picture of Vasquez the entire time (special bionic-limb-edition).
So many parts stuck out that I can't think of a way to organize them. List time:
1. “You sayin’ armless is harmless, sweetie?” - again, you must have some ability to enter a space marine zen-state. Perfect line.
2. "Rodice’s over-the-shoulder railguns. Firing slugs of heat-fused material sucked up from wherever she stood, her pack resembled a real-time ammo-making furnace. As the pace picked up, the inside of her helmet glowed like an inner planet’s OTC holo. Sometimes I heard her laughing as she sprayed out another chattering salvo." - Siri, play the Doom soundtrack
3. The moment when her limb sprouts a whole garden of artillery. The entire piece, for that matter, came laced with adrenaline.
The only think that threw me off was that sometimes the piece switched to present tense. "After a few exhausting minutes, I’m forced to reload" was one, and I think I spotted a few other places. Understandable given the deadline.
A great action-oriented piece overall, full of 'esprit de corps', and 'esprit de Prompt Quest'.
This is a really great pastiche - lots of fun here with the blatant 'dropship scene in aliens starring Vasquez' segues into the first battle sequence in Starship troopers, both of which are fun scenes. I shall have to put those movies on my rewatch list.
"The Fighting Furies were only deployed to where new colonies met resistance from the deadly indigenous, the alien unknown, or the truly pissed off."
I heard Michelle Rodriguez all the way through this. Excellent story.
Did you spend only 2 hours on this story? Or where there some editing rounds?
I loved it! I’m always impressed with what a fantastic writer you are. This gave me ‘War girls’ vibe. Do you know the book?
Fun! Great voice.